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Psychology Personal Statement

The human mind is extremely complex. We may never fully understand how or why it works in the way it does, but with every study carried out we edge closer to this ultimate goal. In-depth knowledge of the human mind and behaviour can be an invaluable resource in many professions, for example, the police force in criminal profiling and many more.

After reading Manwatching by Desmond Morris and upon starting my psychology course in Year 12, I was instantly hooked on the subject. I knew that this is the subject I would like to study in more detail and ultimately achieve a career in a psychology-related field, either clinical or criminal psychology.

I enjoyed carrying out my coursework, which was based on Glass and Singer’s 1972 study into the effects of control on stress levels and ability to perform in a set task. I enjoyed being able to put the skills and knowledge I learned throughout the year into practice, such as analysing and evaluating each aspect of the study.

Being the eldest of four children, with an age difference of thirteen years between the youngest and myself, I have witnessed first-hand the behavioural developments of children from birth to ten years, the age of my sister. This, plus the fact that my Mother is a child-minder means that I have a superb awareness of how behaviour develops in children of all ages.

Taking A-level maths will no doubt help with the statistical side of psychology i.e. analysing the collected data, perhaps the most important part of any study, while biology will provide me with a basic understanding of the biological side of the course. I have an active interest in environmental issues, both local and worldwide and so I volunteered for BTCV, the British Trust for Conservational Volunteers, an organisation dedicated to protecting the woodland and its creatures. For a week (and a previously volunteered weekend), myself and several other volunteers worked together as a team, coppicing small trees and making useful objects out of them, such as hedging posts and posts for deer fences. I found this an extremely valuable experience as it really made me feel that I had made a difference and also improved my ability to work in a team.

My part-time job as a waitress has greatly increased my confidence and ability to deal with the sometimes difficult public and has also given me more independence and more initiative.

In my spare time, I make full use of my gym membership, I am a registered Blood Donor and give blood whenever I can. I also swim regularly and have competed in gymnastic competitions at both district level and for my school, achieving a silver medal. I constantly look for ways in which I can improve my fluency in French and study AS-level French in my free time due to the course not being offered at my school. I speak a little Japanese after being involved in a summer school a few years ago and I have recently begun to learn German. I believe speaking a language is an extremely valuable skill, as knowledge of other cultures will enhance opportunities and expand personal horizons. Many businesses work closely with other companies in other countries and search for employees who can communicate in different languages and understand other cultures, strengthening the business relationships.

I am highly-motivated, hard-working and have a genuine passion for psychology. I believe that university will provide me with more independence and the skills and knowledge needed to enter the field of clinical psychology.

Comments

This statement begins to show a good interest in psychology, but this should be enhanced by being more specific about WHAT is interesting. Too many of the sentences start with 'I', which means it doesn't flow well. The balance is about right with the amount of psychology-related stuff compared to extra curricular stuff.

Review

The human mind is extremely complex. this is a cliched way to start a PS We may never fully understand how or why it works in the way it does, but with every study carried out we edge closer to this ultimate goal. In-depth knowledge of the human mind and behaviour can be an invaluable resource in many professions, for example, the police force in criminal profiling and many more. This sounds like an 'introduction to psychology' - the admissions tutors already know what it is, they want to know first of all why you want to study it. 'Many more' is also too informal

After reading "Manwatching" by Desmond Morris and upon starting my psychology course in Year 12, I was instantly hooked 'hooked' is too informal for a PS on the subject. I knew that this is the subject I would like to study in more detail how? What specifically was interesting? and ultimately achieve a career in a psychology-related field, either clinical or criminal psychology. lots of people will be saying this - while it's not bad or wrong to mention it, it doesn't 'set you out from the crowd'

I enjoyed carrying out my coursework, which was based on Glass and Singer’s 1972 study into the effects of control on stress levels and ability to perform in a set task. I enjoyed being able to put the skills and knowledge I learned throughout the year into practice, such as analysing and evaluating each aspect of the study. did the results reflect the original study? Any evaluative comments? This is the kind of thing that would be good to comment on

Being the eldest of four children, with an age difference of thirteen years between the youngest and myself, I have witnessed first-hand the behavioural developments of children from birth to ten years, the age of my sister. This, plus the fact that my mother is a child-minder means that I have a superb too informal awareness of how behaviour develops in children of all ages. again, this could be enhanced by specific examples and backing it up to modules studied/books read on the subject

Taking A-level maths will no doubt too informal help with the statistical side of psychology i.e. analysing the collected data, perhaps the most important part of any study, while biology will provide me with a basic understanding of the biological side of the course. examples? this A Level stuff isn't going to set you apart from the rest if it's just a couple of sentences. Mentioning books/studies read outside of the A Level syllabus would be far better. I have an active interest in environmental issues, both local and worldwide and so I volunteered for BTCV, the British Trust for Conservational Volunteers, an organisation dedicated to protecting the woodland and its creatures. For a week (and a previously volunteered weekend), it's probably best to avoid brackets, and the bit inside isn't really important myself and several other volunteers worked together as a team, coppicing small trees and making useful objects out of them, such as hedging posts and posts for deer fences. I found this an extremely valuable experience as it really made me feel that I had made a difference and also improved my ability to work in a team. This volunteering bit shouldn't be in the same paragraph as A Level stuff. It would be best if it was cut down a bit too, to accommodate some more bits about psychology

My part-time job as a waitress has greatly increased my confidence and ability to deal with the sometimes difficult public and has also given me more independence and more initiative. Part-time jobs aren't really important for PSs if they aren't related. Also, one sentence doesn't make a paragraph

In my spare time, I make full use of my gym membership, I am a registered blood donor and give blood whenever I can. the two ideas in this sentence don't flow well I also swim regularly and have competed in gymnastic competitions at both district level and for my school, achieving a silver medal. it isn't important to mention prizes won at sports competitions I constantly look for ways in which I can improve my fluency in French and study AS-level French in my free time due to the course not being offered at my school. I speak a little Japanese after being involved in a summer school a few years ago and I have recently begun to learn German. I believe speaking a language is an extremely valuable skill, as knowledge of other cultures will enhance opportunities and expand personal horizons. link to psychology here? Many businesses work closely with other companies in other countries and search for employees who can communicate in different languages and understand other cultures, strengthening the business relationships. not necessary to talk about businesses when applying for a psychology degree

I am highly-motivated, hard-working and have a genuine passion overused word in PSs for psychology. I believe that university will provide me with more independence and the skills and knowledge needed to enter the field of clinical psychology. instead of focusing on the career at the end of it (even a psychology one), it would be better to focus on doing the degree


Article by TSR User on Thursday 15 February 2018

Psychology Personal Statement

I desire an academic approach to the complex processes and interactions that determine human behaviour. I have an extremely analytical mind and objective view on life, and so am fascinated by subjects helping me gain a deeper understanding of the psychological factors that shape our actions and our lives.

The study of Sociology A-level has inspired my inquisitive personality by enabling me to analyse people and society from opposing perspectives, and has led me to develop an interest in the study of psychology. I have increasingly questioned the meaning behind unusual behaviour, such as aggression, and the significance of techniques we use, as humans as defence mechanisms, such as humour. In addition, the multitude of real-world applications of psychology has also aroused my interest. For example, the psychology of group processes can be applied to such contexts ranging from jury decisions, to political debate, to a group of friends' discussion.

Psychology is a subject that I will be suited to as I thrive on debate. I have become a more experienced debater through the analytical A-levels of English Literature, Sociology, History and Economics and through extra-curricular activities. I write articles for the local Village Magazine on topical village events, and I was a member of the school debating society. I often took part in internal debating competitions, many of which were often linked to psychological debates, such as the varying influence of peer groups upon young people's behaviour.

In the field of psychology my varied interests include altruism, the psychology of gender and crowd behaviour. Books that I have read that may aid my studies range from "The Freud Reader" (Edited by Simon Gay) and "The Private Life of the Brain" (Susan Greenfield). In addition, regularly reading the "Psychology Review" has also increased my thirst for the subject, as I have learnt of the dynamic nature of psychology, becoming informed of contemporary debates in psychology, such as the recent criticisms of Philip Zimbardo's famous Stanford prison experiment.

At present I am on a gap year in which I am volunteering full time in a residential accommodation for young people with disabilities to enable them to develop their independent living skills. This invaluable and rewarding opportunity will enable me to give back to a community that I have taken so much from. Furthermore, I intend to travel to either New Zealand or the northern states of the United States. This time will be employed as a chance to explore and study a different culture whilst aiding my preparation for the independence of university life.

My consistent academic achievements and dedication at school were extremely important to me, and were rewarded with the Sixth Form awards for Economics, English Literature and Overall Effort and Achievement. I was also proud to be the only student at my school to ever achieve an Advanced Extension Award (AEA), gaining a Distinction in Economics.

In addition, I took a full and active role in my school's community, and intend to do the same once at University. I acted as a form representative through much of the school, I conducted duties overseeing the main school when in the 6th Form, and I was a library assistant. I also enjoyed supporting school charity events and fundraising events, for example, I sold newspapers, and ribbons supporting National AIDS Day.

In my spare time I enjoy exploring my creative talents through a number of outlets. I am an enthusiastic Saxophone player; I have played in many orchestras and wind bands, and the most recent grade I have taken in Grade 5. I also thoroughly enjoy drama, and have taken part in many school and amateur dramatic performances throughout my school career. In addition, I enjoy abstract painting, and I took a photography course at college last year.

Above all, I believe I am a determined and disciplined student with very high, but realistic goals. I am excited about the immense opportunity of studying psychology at University, learning new skills, knowledge and a tolerance of the diversity of human nature that I will undoubtedly gain.

Comments

Overall, this is a rather good statement! The candidate clearly knows what psychology is about, by mentioning specific examples and has done some extra reading around the subject. Bits do need expanding on in some places and some parts are a little bit 'waffle-y' however.

The order is a bit odd - it would be better to order it 1. intro, 2. academics, 3. school responsibilities 4. extra-curricular activities/hobbies/gap year 5. conclusion

Review

I desire an academic approach to the complex processes and interactions that determine human behaviour. this is a rather cliched first sentence I have an extremely analytical mind and objective view on life, and so am fascinated over-used word in PSs! by subjects helping me gain a deeper understanding of the psychological factors that shape our actions and our lives. this could be expanded on to include some more specific things, or how the applicant became interested in psychology. Also, don't start two sentences in a row with 'I', as they don't flow well together

The study of Sociology A-level 'The study of' is repeated in this sentence, so this should be reworded, such as 'Doing A Level Sociology...' has inspired my inquisitive personality by enabling me this bit is rather wordy! Just saying that it 'has improved your ability...' or something to analyse people and society from opposing perspectives, and has led me to develop an interest in the study of psychology. I have increasingly questioned the meaning behind unusual behaviour, such as aggression, and the significance of techniques we use, as humans as defence mechanisms, such repetition of 'such' and 'as' should be avoided as humour. In addition, the multitude of real-world applications of psychology has also aroused my interest. For example, the psychology of group processes can be applied to such contexts ranging from jury decisions, to political debate, to a group of friends' discussion. don't tell the admissions tutors something they already know! Instead, say why it interests you, by giving more specific examples (e.g. names of researchers)

Psychology is a subject that I will be suited to as I thrive on debate. I have become a more experienced debater through the analytical A-levels of delete 'of' English Literature, Sociology, History and Economics and through extra-curricular activities. I write articles for the local village magazine on topical village events, and I was a member of the school debating society. I often took part in internal debating competitions, many of which were often linked to psychological debates, such as the varying influence of peer groups upon young people's behaviour. this paragraph is a bit off - it goes from subjects, to extra curricular activities to school activities. Try and keep bits the same together. Say how being analytical is good for psychology

In the field of psychology my varied interests include altruism, the psychology of gender and crowd behaviour. several interests have already been mentioned, I would leave this sentence out Books that I have read that may aid my studies range from "The Freud Reader" (edited by Simon Gay) and "The Private Life of the Brain" by Susan Greenfield. the applicant should mention what was learned/what was interesting in these? In addition, regularly reading the "Psychology Review" has also increased my thirst for the subject, as I have learnt of the dynamic nature of psychology, becoming informed of contemporary debates in psychology, such as the recent criticisms of Philip Zimbardo's famous Stanford prison experiment. I wouldn't say that all of the criticisms of the experiment are 'recent' and Zimbardo is a common study to mention, so it doesn't really set you apart from the crowd

At present I am on a gap year in which I am volunteering this wording is kind of awkward full time in  residential accommodation for young people with disabilities to enable them to develop their independent living skills. link to psychology? This invaluable and rewarding opportunity will enable me to give back to a community that I have taken so much from. cliched Furthermore, I intend to travel to either New Zealand or the northern states of the United States. This time will be employed this doesn't quite make sense as a chance to explore and study a different culture psychology link? Although the culture is unlikely to be too different from our own whilst aiding my preparation for the independence of university life.

My consistent academic achievements and dedication at school were extremely important to me, and were rewarded with the sixth form awards for Economics, English Literature and Overall Effort and Achievement. I was also proud to be the only student at my school to ever achieve an Advanced Extension Award (AEA), gaining a distinction in Economics. this is the sort of thing for the referee to mention

In addition, I took a full and active role in my school's community, and intend to do the same once at university. not necessary I acted as a form representative through much of the school, I conducted duties overseeing the main school when in the sixth form, and I was a library assistant. I also enjoyed supporting school charity events and fundraising events; for example, I sold newspapers, delete comma and ribbons supporting National AIDS Day. don't start too many sentences in a row with 'I', as it doesn't flow well

In my spare time I enjoy exploring my creative talents through a number of outlets. kind of informal I am an enthusiastic saxophone player; I have played in many orchestras and wind bands, no comma and the most recent grade I have taken in Grade 5. this is a bit wordy - it would be better to just say 'and have completed Grade 5 I also thoroughly enjoy drama, and have taken part in many school and amateur dramatic performances throughout my school career. In addition, I enjoy abstract painting, and I took a photography course at college last year.

Above all, I believe I am a determined and disciplined student with very high, but realistic goals. I am excited about the immense opportunity of studying psychology at university, learning new skills, knowledge and a tolerance of the diversity of human nature that I will undoubtedly gain. the conclusion needs to be more specific to the degree and say why the applicant is a good candidate for the course


Article by TSR User on Thursday 15 February 2018

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